21.11.2013
English 10
Ms. Klassen
Sonnet Poem
As I walk through the streets
I see others showing love
I look up and see a dove
I miss the feeling of having someone
beside me through the tough times and boredom
But who knows I might find someone
sooner or later on in life
Or perhaps in the future a wife
One that can make me smile whenever
support me and be there for me
I breathe heavily feeling lonely
as I walk down the streets having no company that shares
the same feelings I have for them
There will be someone soon but when?
Love is most important dont draw away from the ones
you care or you will experience a feeling like no other
I like the story of your sonnet, but it doesn't follow the sonnet structure (4 lines per stanza, abab, cdcd, efef, gg), so I suggest that you combine some sentences, also so that you have the iambic pentameter rhythm.
ReplyDeleteI like the message of your sonnet, but you forget to put the rhyme scheme of a sonnet into your Poem
ReplyDelete- Verena